Post by Jude on Jan 26, 2004 21:25:24 GMT
to avoid 
by the queen i will say that i had thought about putting this under fan art of fiction or whatever but then i thought that since it wasn't a spikey thing i couldn't pass it off there. it's a poem - one of many - to go with the book i'm writing. i'm posting it here cos it talks about vampires, guitars and lots of torment si we are not THAT much out of topic are we???
i'd like feedback on this one... be harsh if you have to, i swear not to
!!!
love
jude
ps: i've written others which are much better and much more depressing, but they're also unbelievably long and i didn't want reactions like this
!!!
[glow=red,2,300]THE DARK HALF[/glow]
Yet another sunset in the east
Another wake-up call for the beast
Already do I sense it stirring inside
Uncoiling while shedding its hide
That’s me drowning ‘neath the wave
That’s me dying the death of the brave
Falling like every captain that’s true
To bury my sinking ship in the ocean blue
Down with its load of emotional ordeals
Torn forgotten values and useless ideals
So someone else crawls out of my grave
Dragging me along his reluctant slave
My dark half’s in command
My evil twin’s got the upper hand
My worst instinct’s in charge by now
My humanity’s well at large by now.
Yet another sunrise in the west
Another time I’ve failed this test
Already I have to admit my defeat
That once more I was forced to retreat
And fly a white flag from my broken mast
All feelings denied by my returning past
A past recollected in fire and blood
Drowning all emotions in its flood
Tried to build a dam but it was no use
Fighting destiny well knowing I’d lose
Lose against the quenching thirst
Filling this body till fit to burst
So the slave crawls back into his grave
He’s free now there’s nothing more to save
My dark half’s won the war
My evil twin’s done the score
My worst instinct’s thrown the highest roll
My humanity’s weeping for my lost soul.
by the queen i will say that i had thought about putting this under fan art of fiction or whatever but then i thought that since it wasn't a spikey thing i couldn't pass it off there. it's a poem - one of many - to go with the book i'm writing. i'm posting it here cos it talks about vampires, guitars and lots of torment si we are not THAT much out of topic are we???i'd like feedback on this one... be harsh if you have to, i swear not to
!!!love
jude
ps: i've written others which are much better and much more depressing, but they're also unbelievably long and i didn't want reactions like this
!!![glow=red,2,300]THE DARK HALF[/glow]
Yet another sunset in the east
Another wake-up call for the beast
Already do I sense it stirring inside
Uncoiling while shedding its hide
That’s me drowning ‘neath the wave
That’s me dying the death of the brave
Falling like every captain that’s true
To bury my sinking ship in the ocean blue
Down with its load of emotional ordeals
Torn forgotten values and useless ideals
So someone else crawls out of my grave
Dragging me along his reluctant slave
My dark half’s in command
My evil twin’s got the upper hand
My worst instinct’s in charge by now
My humanity’s well at large by now.
Yet another sunrise in the west
Another time I’ve failed this test
Already I have to admit my defeat
That once more I was forced to retreat
And fly a white flag from my broken mast
All feelings denied by my returning past
A past recollected in fire and blood
Drowning all emotions in its flood
Tried to build a dam but it was no use
Fighting destiny well knowing I’d lose
Lose against the quenching thirst
Filling this body till fit to burst
So the slave crawls back into his grave
He’s free now there’s nothing more to save
My dark half’s won the war
My evil twin’s done the score
My worst instinct’s thrown the highest roll
My humanity’s weeping for my lost soul.
, but much as i love you 
